So here is the redone version with some changes- let me know if this is working better than the last one
So in between work and the kids, I decided to try and enter into the gnomon contest again- this months subject- plague. I think I may be done but I wanted to run the piece by you guys to get crits before I send it in. tried a lot of new things on this piece that I hope are working in its favor. Let me know what i can do to improve and hopefully I can get this into gnomon on time. thanks everyone
Sam this is one of the better pieces I have seen from you. I can definitely tell Tomer and Asaf are rubbing off on you! I am having a hard time with reading the figures against their bacground. The values group together and it's not as graphically dynamic as it could be. I would say drop the gray (make it white or a warm creamy white) and atmosphere (value transition in the hall). Keep the background very graphic (let the drawing suggest the atmosphere/perspective) AND make sure that the red you do use is leading the viewers eye from figure to figure. That last part is huge. Looks super good though man!
ReplyDeleteOh and finish drawing the figure on the left! Don't cheat me!
ReplyDeleteGood to hear from you Cliff! Great suggestions- all of which I will get to work on right away. BTW what have you been up to? I work at kmart now and I get all sorts of different answers as to where you went and what you are doing. Anyway, I will get going on the corrections and I will repost when done.
ReplyDeletethanks!
I moved back to Phoenix and I'm a media consultant for Careerbuilder.com. It's pretty time consuming and doesn't provide much time for art but I get paid.....that's all that matters right now.
ReplyDeleteCan u do me a favor and show me what it would look like if everything above the semi circle was white? No line or nothing, just white. I think you may be putting to much information back there that's not as important.
ReplyDeletePut the read back behind the guy on the right head and no drawing at the top in the white space. If it looks to sparce add back in the cream color.
ReplyDeleteReal quick question- do you mean "read" or "red"?
ReplyDeletesorry red. My bad.
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